Posts by lilachorses3

Character Name: Flameflower

Character Age: 13 moons

Gender: female

Alliance: Riverclan

Rank: Flameflower is a warrior/queen.

Appearance (6 or more sentences): Flameflower's fur is a pretty pale ginger color, with faint tabby stripes. She has darker patches on her tail tip, legs, and paws. Her eyes are gemstone green, and sparkle in the sunlight. Flameflower's face appears delicate, with a small nose and fluffy ears. Her tail is long and feather-like and her fur is medium length, soft, smooth, and sleek. She appears almost ghost like, when she moves and when she runs, her feet never seem to touch the ground. She is slim, with paws that seem a bit over-sized on her skinny legs.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Flameflower's personality is unique; she is very kind, gentle, and caring. She makes a great mother, because she has a calm personality, but she gets panicky around large groups. She is shy, and often needs time alone to think. She doesn't speak much, and prefers to remain quite, because she doesn't like to draw attention to herself. She always sees good in everything, thinks positively, and believes that there is always someone on her side.
---Likes (at least 3): Flameflower loves to just be free, and loves to run as fast as she can, jump as high as she can, and show her family she can be strong. She loves to know that other cats care about her, and she loves having family and friends. Flameflower's favorite season is new-leaf (spring) because everything is blooming, waking up from winter, and new-leaf is the return of warm weather. Flameflower also enjoys swimming fishing, and just playing around in the water.
--- Dislikes (at least 3): Flameflower dis-likes large crowds, and they make her nervous. She dosen't like being surrounded, even though she loves having close friends. Flameflower also does not like the moor, because she feels unsafe their, and worries others will attack her from any direction.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): Flameflower is swift, fast, and graceful. She can swim and fish perfectly, and knows lots of important herbs for injury or sickness.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): Flameflower is constantly suspicious, she always glances behind herself, and jumps at the slightest crack of a twig. Another weakness that Flameflower has is fighting, because she is not very strong, and it is easy for other cats to overwhelm her. Also, in battle, she always tries to help the wounded, with out caring about her own safety, which puts Flameflower in a lot of danger.

History (8 or more sentences): Flameflower's parents were killed when Flameflower was only a few moons old. She wandered the forest alone, hungry, and scared. She finally collapsed next to a river. Flameflower got caught up in the current, and washed down river. A Riverclan warrior scooped her out, and she was raised in Riverclan. After she was old enough to travel, and could fish well, she left Riverclan. She traveled the clans, living for a while in each, always moving. She returned to Riverclan and recieved her warrior name. After that, she traveled to Skyclan. It was there that she met a young tom named Darkstorm. They fell in love, and soon Darkstorm and Flameflower were traveling all over the clans. They stopped in Riverclan, were Flameflower was raised, and Flameflower gave birth to 3 healthy kits; Icekit, Rosekit, and Patchkit. Now the kits travel with Flameflower and Darkstorm, throughout the clans.

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Flameflower's pale ginger fur stood out in contrast to the bright green leaves that littered the forest floor and her glowing eyes matched the leaves. She ran, silent and graceful, through the forest. Her paws never seemed to touch the ground. It was late New-leaf, and Flameflower was heading out to fish. She stopped, suddenly, ghost like, at the river's edge. Padding expertly along the bank, she looked for the perfect place to settle. Sitting so that her shadow was not cast over the water, she scanned the rushing blue river. In a flash like lightning, she had scooped a fat trout from the stream. It flew onto the bank, dewdrops scattering in every direction, settling on Flameflower's pelt. Sunlight bounced off the dewdrops as Flameflower swiftly ended the trout's life. Gracefully, she picked up her catch and raced, silently up the slope.

Comments (optional): Flameflower is my first character, and I hope that she is worthy of advanced role play. If my cat's bio is not satisfactory, please comment. I hope that someone will approve of Flameflower. :)

Character Name:Darkstorm

Character Age: 15 moons

Gender: male

Alliance: Riverclan

Rank: warrior

Appearance (6 or more sentences): Darkstorm's fur is jet black, darker than nighttime, and he has one white paw. A pale silver stripe runs down his back to the tip of his tail, and his fur is sleek and thick, and his eyes are icy blue, and somewhat intimidating. He is very tall and broad shouldered, and his tail is long and fluffy. He always appears calm, even if inside he is on fire. When Darkstorm jumps, he looks very powerful and his claws are long and sharp enough to make others flinch just by looking. Darkstorm's nose is small, and his ears are large and fluffy.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Even though Darkstorm isn't perfect, he goes to great measures to make sure others think he is. He is brave, determined, and confident. Darkstorm values his mate, Flameflower, and his 3 kits, Icekit, Rosekit, and Patchkit, as the most important thing in his life and he would do anything to insure their safety. Darkstorm is practically afraid of nothing but he is easily angry, even though inside, he is very softhearted. The only thing that keeps Darkstorm glued to life is his mate- Flameflower.
---Likes (at least 3): Darkstorm loves to see his family happy and safe and also loves to feel free and unowned, like his mate. Darkstorm enjoys running, climbing, and swimming with his family, and most of all-jumping.
--- Dislikes (at least 3): Darkstorm hates when other toms look at Flameflower with interest, even though he knows Flameflower loves him more than anything, and he dislikes cats who make threatening moves toward his family. Darkstorm gets aggravated when his flaws show, and feels embarrassed that he isn't perfect, even though no-one is.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): Darkstorm is strong, brave, and fearless. He can jump higher than most, and pushes himself hard.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): Darkstorm is bad at swimming, even though he lives in Riverclan. One of his weaknesses is that he is easily angry, has trouble accepting his flaws, and wishes to be perfect.

History (8 or more sentences): Darkstorm has a dark history. His father, who's name Darkstorm refuses to think about, murdered Darkstorm's mother. Darkstorm's father had dark ambitions to rule the forest. Darkstorm's father thought that the mistake that Tigerstar made was being to open about his plans, so Darkstorm's father began murdering cats in secret. No one could guess who had done it, because Darkstorm's father had seemed like a loyal warrior. Finally, Darkstorm became so angry at his father, that he drove him out of the clan. Soon after, Darkstorm fell in love with Flameflower. As he was traveling with his pregnant mate, he knew his father was stalking them. When Darkstorm's father attempted to kill Flameflower and the kits she was carrying, Darkstorm ended his father. Gentle Flameflower didn't stop him from tearing his father to bits. Now Darkstomr travels with his kits, and is overly protective of his family.

Role-play Sample; Darkstorm raced through the forest and pushed off with his hind legs. He landed on a sturdy oak branch, digging in his claws to stay on. The branch was wet and slippery from the rain that recently fell. Darkstorm smiled and straightened. He was proud of his history in Skyclan, but Riverclan was his real home now. He padded along the branch and leaped higher into the tree, his jumps higher and farther than that of a full Riverclan cat. The wind rustled the leaves and blew his thick fur sideways. He purred in pleasure and settled on a branch, watching the river rush past. He loved to watch the river, and found it fascinating. He couldn't swim nearly as well as a Riverclan cat, but Flameflower had taught him to fish fairly well.

Thank you so much for giving me advice on my bio. :) Are the sentences still choppy? :)

I added an alliance and roleplay sample :)

[move]Icekit[/move]
Icekit yawned while she groomed her silver Bengal fur. She was hopelessly bored, and wanted a friend to play with. She was sick of wrestling with her siblings, and wanted another friend in Riverclan.
[move]Rosekit[/move]
Rosekit's soft ginger rose and fell as she slept.
[move]Patchkit[/move]
Patchkit rolled onto his back and pawed at a floating feather, longing for another tom to play with. He thought that his she-cat siblings were annoying, and wanted a brother.

[move]Rainclan![/move]
Territory;

Camp;

Religion and Rules;

Ranks;

Cherrystar;

Form;

[move]Rainclan...Let your destiny find you[/move]

Sorry about that. I fixed some of the mistakes. Are my sentences still to choppy? :)

Thank you so much for commenting on my bio. :)
I added some sentences, removed most of the emoticons, and fixed the choppy sentences. Are they still to choppy? I'm really bad at not having choppy sentences.

I'm very sorry about these choppy sentences. I made some changes, and I hope they are enough. I really appreciate you guys helping me make my cat's bio better. :)

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Hi, I have a question about advanced role playing. I had two advanced bios which were approved, and I posted to get my account enabled. If I would like to make another advanced bio for a different cat, do I get it approved, and then will I have to post to get my account enabled again?

Okay, thank you :)

[move]Rosekit[/move]
Character Name: Rosekit

Character Age: 4 moons (4 months)

Gender: Female

Alliance: Riverclan

Rank: Kit

Appearance (6 or more sentences): Rosekit is a tiny kitten, with thick fluffy fur. Her pelt is white, with pale ginger patches. She has a dark ginger tail tip, and left front paw. Rosekit's eyes are sea blue, and wide. Her nose is a delicate pink color, and her large paws look huge because of her long fur. Rosekit's tail is long and fluffy, and her kitten fur is soft.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Rosekit is very kind and caring. She tries to be outgoing, but she is actually really shy. Despite her efforts, her shyness is obvious. She is gentle, and winces at the sight of blood. She's a scardy cat, and somewhat lazy. When her littermates are racing around, she prefers to sleep, or do something less adventurous; like sorting herbs.
---Likes (at least 3): Rosekit loves when things she does helps other cats; she likes to see others happy, and having fun. Her favorite thing to do is collect herbs. When she is traveling with her family, she helps them if they are sick.
--- Dislikes (at least 3): Rosekit hates large crowds, and having to much attention focused on herself. She is fears closed spaces, like caves, because she feels trapped.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): Rosekit is graceful like her mother, and inherited her father's Skyclan talent of jumping. She feels at home in the trees.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): Rosekit's weaknesses mostly have to do with what ifs. She's scared to go into caves because she's worried that she'll get trapped, and she's scared to swim, because she's worried she will drown. Rosekit is scared to go on the moor because she thinks someone can creep up on her from any direction. Her anxiety and worries cause her lots of trouble.

History (8 or more sentences): Rosekit is the daughter of Flameflower and Darkstorm. Her mother Flameflower was a rouge. Flameflower's parents died, so she wandered the forest alone. When Flameflower fell in the river, she was rescued by a Riverclan warrior. She was raised is Riverclan, and grew up to be a talented swimmer. Flameflower traveled the clans when she was old enough. While visiting Skyclan, she met Rosekit's father, Darkstorm. Darkstorm was a young Skyclan warrior, haunted by his own history. Darkstorm's father had been power thirsty, and willing to kill for power. Darkstorm had driven his father out of the clan, after his father killed his mother. Darkstorm chose to go with Flameflower to Riverclan. As they traveled, Darkstorm's father followed them. Darkstorm's father attempted to kill Flameflower and the kits she was carrying. Darkstorm killed his father, and he and Flameflower fled to Riverclan, were Rosekit and her siblings- Icekit and Patchkit, were born.

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Rosekit curled up in her nest beside Icekit. Her sibling was restless, and rolling around in her sleep. Gentle Rosekit didn't complain, and closed her eyes, curling her fluffy tail over her ears. She soon drifted off into an uneasy sleep. Rosekit dreamed of her father's history in Skyclan. She imagined a night black tom killing a little grey she-cat, and she imagined her father, full of rage, driving his own father out of the clan. Then she imagined him fleeing Skyclan with a young ginger she-cat he had fallen in love with. She dreamed that the night black tom stalked them, and her father turning and killing the tom. Rosekit woke, her eyes wide in fear. Flameflower gently soothed Rosekit, "We are safe here, Rose. Safe with Riverclan."

Comments (optional): If you want to take a look at my other advanced bios, I have two approved, for Rosekit's parents; Flameflower: http://warriorcatsrpg.com/index.php?topic=514779.0
and her father, Darkstorm: http://warriorcatsrpg.com/index.php?topic=515334.0

OOC; Accepted :) We can role play here. Sign ups are still open for anyone who wants to join.
IC; Cherrystar leaped into a birch tree, and landed gracefully on a branch. She dug in her claws to keep her grip, and looked down at the camp. Large bushes would serve as great dens for the warriors and apprentices. The medicine cats' den should be the cave in the rocks, and the elders' and leader's dens the smaller caves. The most sheltered bush would be a great nursery. Cherrystar shook drops of falling rain from her pelt, and watched the silent forest. She could scent a cat near by.

OOC: Accepted, we can role play here, and sign ups are still open for any one to join.
IC; "Hello?" Cherrystar called cautiously. She scanned the trees, looking for the cat she had scented.

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Cherrystar leaped gracefully out of the tree and landed on the ground. She looked at the silver she-cat. "Hi," Cherrystar said, judging that this cat meant her no harm, "I'm Cherrystar."

Cherrystar smiled at Featherstorm, but tensed in-case Featherstorm attacked. "Welcome to Rainclan. What brings you into our territory?" Cherrystar asked, her voice cautious, but kind. She purposely said "our territory" so Featherstorm would not know she was alone here. Well, apart from her father Swiftclaws. But Swiftclaws was in Starclan, and he couldn't defend her here. Only warn her in her dreams. And he hadn't warned Cherrystar of any danger recently.

OOC; You said in your form that Hawkfrost was a tom. :)
IC; Cherrystar glanced away from Featherstorm when she saw a movement in the ferns. When Cherrystar scented the air, she smelled unfamiliar cat scent, but she suspected it was just Featherstorm's trail. The movement had probably been just a squirrel, Cherrystar decided, turning back to Featherstorm.